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The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.

The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.
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The line graph illustrates the median group of people in the UK travelling daily by
car
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,
bus
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, and
train
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 over a
period
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 of 60
years
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.
Overall
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, travelling by
car
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 and
train
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 showed a steady but significant rise over the
period
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.
While
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a
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the
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 number of commuters, who use
bus
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 has fallen over the term. In 1970 the travelling by
car
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 and
train
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 were nearly 5,4 and 2,6
million
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 respectively. The number of
car
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users
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 frantically increased by 6
million
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 by 1990. The
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bus
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number of bus
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 and
train
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 consumers were constant until 2000, but
then
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 the
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bus
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number of bus
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users
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tostarted
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started
to started
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deteriorate
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 throughout the
period
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 and it reached the nadir of 3
million
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. The
car
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 and
train
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 consumers were permanent from 2000 to 2010
years
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. In
the
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apply
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early 2010
years
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,
car
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users
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 started to grow
up
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slowly until 2020
years
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, and following
years
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car
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 and
train
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users
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 surged frantically to 2030
years
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. They arrived
vertec
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vertex
 of approximately 3 and 9
million
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 properly the end of
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period
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the period
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, period, years, million, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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