The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.

The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.
The line graph illustrates the median group of people in the UK travelling daily by
car
,
bus
, and
train
over a
period
of 60
years
.
Overall
, travelling by
car
and
train
showed a steady but significant rise over the
period
.
While
a
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number of commuters, who use
bus
has fallen over the term. In 1970 the travelling by
car
and
train
were nearly 5,4 and 2,6
million
respectively. The number of
car
users
frantically increased by 6
million
by 1990. The
bus
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number of bus
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and
train
consumers were constant until 2000, but
then
the
bus
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number of bus
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users
tostarted
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started
to started
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deteriorate
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throughout the
period
and it reached the nadir of 3
million
. The
car
and
train
consumers were permanent from 2000 to 2010
years
. In
the
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early 2010
years
,
car
users
started to grow
up
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slowly until 2020
years
, and following
years
car
and
train
users
surged frantically to 2030
years
. They arrived
vertec
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vertex
of approximately 3 and 9
million
properly the end of
period
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the period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, period, years, million, users with synonyms.
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