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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #part #group #activities #time
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"Encouraged to have a group of entertainment activities is necessary for
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 in their free
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" some people believe.But some
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 like their
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 to spend more
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 with their own.In my opinion , giving
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 an opportunity to
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 for having an independent plan with their piers is more helpful for them in their lives. On the one hand ,some people tend to create groups for their
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 ,because of increasing their relationships among their peers.
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 ,they will manage it in the best conditions ,Because ,they want to avoid their frustration and isolation in society.If the
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 spend more
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 with their
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 in their free
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 under parental supervision , certainly , they can keep themselves aware of possible risks.I think , training the
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 by creating a creative group
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 trustworthy for them would be more helpful .Because they have a better
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 with their
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 in their leisure
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 ,
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 compared them to have independable personality in their future. In fact,having the correct
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's relationships is the main worry for their
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.
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, the
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 are afraid of their
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's communication ,because of the dangers of new relationships.
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 ,they tend to spend more
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 between themselves and their
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 in
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's leisure
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 of spending
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 with their
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.
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, going to the cinema ,having a picnic near a river or having exercise with their family. From my point of view,
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 kind of
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 have compulsory activities for their
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 and restrict them to their family. That would be more dangerous for
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 in their future lives.It is that they could not have applicable decisions in their chosen suitable
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 for themselves. In conclusion,
parents
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 can make their
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's personalities through their decisions about giving the opportunity to their
children
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 to choose which plan to have in their free
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,with their
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 or alone or with their family,
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 related to their choices in future.
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coherence cohesion
Add a conclusion paragraph to summarize your main points and provide a clear opinion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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