You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Protecting the Environment is the responsibility of the government. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Write at least 250 words

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some citizens think that saving the
eco - system
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is the responsibility of the
government
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, I totally disagree with
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notion. I strongly believe that
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the main reason for destroying the
environment
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is human activity, and nothing else.
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, as citizens, we are unable to point out the
government
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's failure to protect our
environment
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. We all benefit from our surrounding
environment
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, not only the
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. Humans are the most dangerous enemy of the
environment
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, so as humans, it is our responsibility to protect the
environment
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, not the
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's. From the first breath we take into the
environment
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until we die, we get more and more benefits from it. But we do not do anything as a gift to the
environment
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.
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our
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day
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by
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, our natural
resources
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are going to decline. If the governments in all of the countries in the world apply many laws to
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resources
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as well as
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minimize the dangerous activities that might destroy the
environment
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, it will not work. because most of the citizens in the world do not obey the rules, violate the rules and regulations, and live without thinking about their
kids
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future.
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, we have more needs,
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, we use natural
resources
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without thinking that one
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they will show wear and tear. We add waste products to the air
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to the water
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of some synthetic products. Not only that,
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, people increase the amount of area that belongs to the forests,
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are
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good friend of the
environment
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for their 'never-ending needs. If the
government
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spent
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tax money to protect the
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that is
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not enough.
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, I would like
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that, only the
government
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has the responsibility to protect the
environment
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lonly
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alone
, as a public, we all touch our hands together to protect our natural
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, fresh air, and pure water for our future. If not, humans will disappear from the earth not so far away.
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  • for instance
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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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