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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Museum has
been
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changed a lot from 1998 to 2008, except
the
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tickets
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ticket
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entrance
 or exit and permanent
exhibition
 rooms. In the middle of
Museum
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the Museum
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, there
were
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was
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 a large garden behind the
tickets
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ticket
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entrance
 in 1998
while
cafe
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a cafe
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 sitting area and fountains were added into it at the year of 2008. The
cafe
 was on the back of the garden but WC was moved from the right side to the
cafe
 nearby in 2008. On the left side of the
entrance
, there
were
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used to be
temporary
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a temporary
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exhibition
 room. But after 10 years there was a shop and a bags and coats site which used to be
in
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 the right side of the
entrance
. The temporary
exhibition
 room was next to them. At the left corner facing the temporary
exhibition
 room and
cafe
, a restaurant was standing there.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words entrance, exhibition, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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