The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009
The graphic charts above
illustrates
Change the verb form
illustrate
proportion
Correct article usage
the proportion
number
of new houses in almost a decade from 2000 to 2009 in Derby and Nottingham.
It's clear that in 2009, both two cities reached its peak of their highest number
. Moreover
, every cities
Change to a singular noun
city
show
different trends Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
in
each Change preposition
apply
year
.
Firstly
we will talk about Derby. The number
in this
city shows gradual
increase as per Correct article usage
a gradual
new
Correct article usage
the new
year
. It starting
from below 50 Wrong verb form
started
house
in 2000 and in 2003 it escalated the growth Fix the agreement mistake
houses
number
at
above 100 and kept stable until 2007. Change preposition
to
Therefore
, it shows
Wrong verb form
showed
significantly
increases in 2008 by approximately Change the word
significant
above
250 and it kept growing until reached almost 350 in 2009.
Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, in Nottingham, it's pretty much different from Derby. The proportion in each year
is very fluctuative. In early 2000, Nottingham only reached above 50, however
it didn't grow and eventually dropped below 30 in 2002. Next Add a comma
,however
year
, it shows
Wrong verb form
showed
Correct article usage
a slightly
slightly
improvement in 2003 by approximately 50 and Change the adverb
slight
Wrong verb form
continued
continue
grow until 2005 before it decreased extremely in 2006 Add the particle
tocontinue
nearly
0. It came back stronger in 2007 by around 200 and dropped dead again Change preposition
to nearly
nearly
zero in 2008.Change preposition
to nearly
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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