Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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one of the accident causes. some old
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mental problems
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several issues like
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the speed limit and showing off on the
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mature enough to ride a vehicle.
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for instance
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structure, signs and monitoring
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using phones
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about the
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attention . -
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should take different actions to
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measures.
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the
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, as it will save a lot of effort and money .
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health problem is a must to save
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and other lives
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appropriate roads with clear signs on
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. that’s why adding radars is important to catch anyone
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limit or using
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while
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young
people
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as amenities in the car to ensure they
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one
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of the issues that impact
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safety but in my opinion
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there
there's
other reasons we shouldn’t neglect it
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,
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should be observe
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it to imprace
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safety .
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