some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world,subject like science and technology are more important than History. discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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number of job
opportunity
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and population in the country, the choice for the students in choosing their
subjects
has become debatable. People say history is more important than
the
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other
subjects
.
While
others argue that in the modern
world
,
science
plays an important role in ruling
this
world
with technology. In my opinion I feel both the
subjects
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their own purposes,
therefore
they are equally important. History as a
subject
,
it
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is
extremely
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useful
subject
for those who are interested in the field of arts and
politic s
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politics
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.
ti
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will guide
individual
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individuals
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how
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on how
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the country has survived
via
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tremendous trouble and
then
it gives
and
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information on how to go about in the future.
For instance
,
great
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leader of India,
Mahathma
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Mahatma
Gandi
has
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regained its independence from
British
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the British
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by
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his
non violent
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strategy.
This
strategy is implemented in the daily lives of many people these days and by some freedom fighters. For
them
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it is so important and they feel it can rule the continent.
On the other hand
,
science
subjects
are said to be modern
subjects
that
is
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dominating the
world
. More and more people are becoming more interested in
this
filed
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field
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as more employment
opportunity
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opportunities
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have
been emerged
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in
this
area.
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, go to
hospital
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the hospital
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you see doctors,
nurses
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and nurses
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they
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who
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are from
science
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a science
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background and go to
construction
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site you see machine operators and engineers
they
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who
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come from the same background, in
short
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every field is covered with the
science
knowledge
therefore
, all those job
enthusiast
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considers
science
as the most important
subject
in
this
modern
world
. In my
opinion
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I feel both the
subjects
are equally important depending upon how they serve the purposes. In a nutshell, in
this
technological
world
,
science
subject
is considered dominant,
however
; for the purpose of its independence, portraying
of
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its cultural inheritance and security history
on the other hand
is equally valuable.
Hence
they are both indispensable to the modern school
subject
.
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  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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