Some people think that they should spend money they earn now enjoying life, while others think that the money should be put into savings for future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sports activities are extremely important for the

countries

. Many people prefer to join competitive activities in order to

fun

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and watch.

On the other hand

, if some

countries

host some football, basketball or tennis

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tournament

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a lot of people can come as a tourist.

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, they can contribute

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economy. That's why

this

topic is very important for

countries

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that, a lot of people are against

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be host

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for

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the competition, they need to spend a lot of money.

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tournament, they have to build new stadiums or hotels. It will be very heavy for the country.

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will spend time and money and they should pay big insurance for the employers.

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, they may struggle

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problem.

Consequently

, these two arguments can provide advantages and disadvantages. Big tournaments can give income

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the country.

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, at the same time, it might be harmful

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the

countries

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economy.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

161 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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financial management
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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