The best way to encourage employees is managers giving positive comments. What other methods can also be used? Discuss and give your opinion

-I have chosen
this
university because the university provides different
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like undergraduate
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, postgraduate
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, short
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and many more
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also
they accept all kinds of backgrounds students some are from around the corner
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others
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around the world.
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, the university staff is very supportive, students can gain sports and fitness facilities, libraries, accommodation and
career enhancing
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. - I have chosen
BA
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(Hons) Business Management
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because my experience in business management is very strong and powerful. The number of years
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in
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this
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very easily and I found
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whereas
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business is my great strength which I have already proven in my past
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experiences
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and my skills of handling team management, product improvement, team building and leadership
also
help me to taken
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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