In the modern world, people are no longer necessary to use food from animals or product from animals such as medicine and clothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some people argue that we do not need to
use
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animals
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anymore for
food
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, pharma and
fashion
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the fashion
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industry
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.
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I believe that we still need to
use
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animals
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as a
food
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source, it is not
necessery
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necessary
to
use
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them
for
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produce products for medicine and clothing because of recent developments in synthetic biology. Our current
food
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production
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system mostly
depend
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on
the
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farm
animals
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and current animal
production
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systems not sustainable. Because of
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reason, the
industry
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looking for alternative protein sources from microorganisms, insects, and plants.
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, current alternative protein
production
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methods from
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this
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resources
too
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costly.
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, the
production
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capacity
not
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enough
for
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supply
overall
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demand. So, until find
the
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feasible way to produce
food
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from alternative resources, we
are
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depen
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depend
on farm
animals
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.
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, after
breaktrough
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breakthrough
developments in synthetic biology, we do not need to
use
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animals
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for medicine ingredients and
fashion
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industry
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. Different genetic engineering methods enable us to produce antibodies,
pain-killer
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and antibiotics from model organisms.
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, scientists can alter bacterial
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to produce insulin that
previously
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made by pigs and horses.
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, they can simply take a single skin stem cell from
cow
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and make
artificial
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cell line with
mimicing
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mimics
animal's
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the animal's
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environment in
laboratory
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include
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body
temprutare
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temperature
, blood flow and carbon dioxide level. In that way, they can turn
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cell line into the end product that can be used in the fashion
industry
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. In conclusion, thanks to
improvement
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in life sciences, we do not need to
use
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animals
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in some industries but still need improvement in that field
for
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expand
that
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the
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products in
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food
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industry
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.
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