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The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph depicts the release of
nitrogen
oxide
 from four different vehicles, namely diesel cars, petrol cars,
lorries
 and
buses
. Data is calibrated in
gram
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grams
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 per
km
.
Overall
, it is evident that the maximum
nitrogen
oxide
emission
 is from
the
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buses
, followed by
lorries
 and
very
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the very
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 least gas
emission
 is from petrol and diesel cars.
To begin
 with, at 10kmp
speed
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,speed
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 the diesel car produced approximately 7g of
nitrogen
oxide
 per kilometer. The level of
emission
 decreased when the speed
has
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increased and at speed starting from 50kmp, it remained
5
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g/
km
,
while
 when a petrol car is at 10kmp it produced a little over 10g/
km
 of
nitrogen
oxide
. As the speed increased, the quantity of
emission
 decreased slightly and at 80
km
/
hr
 speed, it was about 9g/
km
. Interestingly, at speeds above 110km/
hr
, the rate of
emission
 of
nitrogen
oxide
 increased.
On the other hand
, For
lorries
, the
emission
 level was the highest (33g/
km
) at 10km/
hr
 speed and reached the lowest (17g/
km
) at 90km/
hr
 speed. The rate of emissions increased again at speeds above 90km/
hr
 and it was 25g/
km
 at 130km/
hr
 speed. At 10
km
/
hr
 speed, they produced 40g/
km
 of
nitrogen
oxide
.
Emission
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The emission
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 level was the lowest (6g/
km
) at 60km/
hr
 speed and it increased dramatically at higher speeds. At 130km/
hr
 speed,
buses
 were producing as much as 43g/
km
 of
nitrogen
oxide
. At 60kmp both
lorries
 and
buses
 produced almost equal
amount
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amounts
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 of
nitrogen
oxide
(approximately 25g/
km
).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nitrogen, oxide, lorries, buses, km, emission, kmp, g, hr with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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