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You have recently missed a project deadline which resulted in your company losing an important client. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: oapologize for what happened oexplain why you missed the deadline otell him/her how you will avoid this situation in future.

#project #deadline #company #client #manager #oapologize #oexplain #otell #situation #future
Dear, Mr, Shah, I am writing
this
 letter in regard to apologize for my
delay
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subsimision
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submission
 of the project report which
is
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unfortunately turned
to
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out to
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 be a big
lost
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 for our company. I take full responsibility for my unforgivable mistake and lack of sincerity towards
this
 important project. Hereby, I would like you to give insight
of
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this
 matter. As
you
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 aware
about
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my daughter's congenital heart disease situation. Before the deadline
of
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 the project submission, my daughter had
a
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severe chest pain and
she
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was not able to
breath
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, so my husband and I quickly took her
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 emergency hospital and doctors performed her surgery on the same day. It had been
a crucial moments
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 for us as she was very sick and I almost forgot my work.After surgery,
doctor
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 told us that she was out of risk and we took a breath of relief. As soon as
,
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 she came from the hospital, I called Mr, Patel, but he mentioned that it was too late to inform
and
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 we almost lost an important client. I would like
you
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to offer my sincere apology for
this
 matter. I would like you to request to give me one more chance to communicate with that client and explain my situation and I will give you my assurance that
this
 kind of
mistakes
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 will not happen in future. I am looking forward to your positive response. Yours sincerely, Urvashi
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task response
Ensure that the letter addresses all components of the given task, including a clear apology, explanation, and future plan.
coherence and cohesion
The letter lacks a clear overall structure and coherent use of paragraphing. Ensure that ideas are organized logically and cohesively throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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