In some countries , owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation

Nowadays, many
people
prefer to be a homeowner rather than
be
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a tenant. There are many reasons why
this
is the case. Personally, in my opinion, there are both pros and cons
for
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this
situation and I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, I think one of the most important reasons why
people
choose to own a
house
is that, they don't need to be worried about moving to a new
house
every year. Most tenants are getting annoyed by moving each year as it is too expensive.
Furthermore
, most
people
prefer to spend
money
on
mortgage
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instead
of
the
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rent. They believe that by spending
money
on renting
home
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, they are wasting their wealth. I take my parents as an example. They bought a
house
twenty years ago and now it has only remained five years more to
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their mortgage and after they will own their
house
for the rest of their life.
In addition
, some
people
think that by being a
home owner
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you can show others the quality of your life and be a rich person in their views.
On the other hand
, it is not
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easy to own a
house
. You have to have enough
money
for the down payment in order to buy a
house
. Not many
people
can afford the expenses to become a
home owner
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young adults who just got married.
As a result
, they ask their parents to help them financially and in some cases the
parent
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don't want to reject their kids and will help them even if they are not capable
to
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and they will go under pressure.
To conclude
, there are both advantages and disadvantages aspects of owning a
house
,
however
, I believe that it should be viewed as a positive aspect as you don't waste your
money
by buying it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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