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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbitone now and planned future development

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbitone now and planned future development
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The maps illustrate the plane of one of the industrial estates that appear currently and after developing
it
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as a residential area in the future.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that present day, there are more factories surrounding the roundabout at the centre.
In contrast
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, after doing changes it will be transformed into a residence with facilities including; health care, education and shopping. When looking at the first plan, there is a river flow across in the north and the farmland is situated in the middle of the north side of the riverbank. The only buildings that appear on the site are manufacturing buildings established around the roundabout from the east of the town .
Next,
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take a look at the future plan,
in contrast
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, more transport facilities will be added in
coming
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the coming
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 days by constructing roads that access new homes and other stations. A significant amount of housing complexes will be included. The farmland shifted to the northeast and new houses
will have
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appeared. The
road
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 will extended and a bridge will be built across the river to allow entry. Another
road
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 will be seen which runs from the roundabout to the Northwest to facilitate two housing projects going to be constructed. The new small roundabout will have appeared in the south which connects the centre. The shopping area
establishes
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 in the southwest
whereas
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 the health centre will be in the
east south
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east-south
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. The
road
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 directly to the East ends up at the school.
Furthermore
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, factories
in
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by the side will be converted into
the
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residencies and the play area will be constructed
in
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between the two housing complexes on the North of the
road
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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