Two-part question Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

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It is true that nowadays by improving modern technologies, it is interesting to watch foreign

films

rather than locally filmed

films

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, I would say that it

caused

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by the people and might be by

government

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the government

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however

, in the future

local

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the local

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country’s

films

might uplifted. There are several arguments why

this

could be. One of the main

reason

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reasons

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is not modern countries or

in other words

not improved countries. Because for filming

movies

country

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the country

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should have modified technologies,

equipments

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equipment

types of equipment

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and so on.

Whereas

, my country

have

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not any kinds of technologies, huge buildings

e.t.c

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etc

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according to

the sayings of experts

being

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like China or

United

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States of

America

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my country should work, build,

improve

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approximately

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20 years.

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majority of

locally

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people

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choose

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chose

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watch foreign

films

. There is

also

one huge problem

about

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with

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financial support. In

local

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the local

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area

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government

give

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not enough

money

for filming scenes. The organisers of

movies

find

money

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the money

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for

own

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their own

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films

, and

definitely

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it is not enough.

According to

the statistics of Kazakhstan in

last

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2022 year just over 80

percent

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people

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of people

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filmed for

own

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their own

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money

only

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for approximately 20

percent

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films

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of films

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government

gave

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money

Moreover

, because

movies

were

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apply

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historical, which is not interesting

rather

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but rather

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foreign.

Consequently

, if it

continue

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, in Kazakhstan there will not quite good

films

furthermore

the industry will not grow. In conclusion, there were reasons

about

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for

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foreign and

locally

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local

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films

. Taking everything mentioned into account in our final, analysis we can say that the

government

should support

industry

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the industry

an industry

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films

moreover

, organisers should film action,interesting

movies

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Two-part question Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. *Why could this be? *Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

in the future, nobody will buy printers newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our times is the loss particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How can this problem be overcome?

Some people think news has no connection to people's lives so then it is a waste of time to read news paper and watch television news programs To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making temperature higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising ?

Two-part question Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?