Two-part question Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

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It is true that nowadays by improving modern technologies, it is interesting to watch foreign

films

rather than locally filmed

films

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, I would say that it

caused

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by the people and might be by

government

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the government

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however

, in the future

local

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the local

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country’s

films

might uplifted. There are several arguments why

this

could be. One of the main

reason

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reasons

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is not modern countries or

in other words

not improved countries. Because for filming

movies

country

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the country

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should have modified technologies,

equipments

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equipment

types of equipment

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and so on.

Whereas

, my country

have

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not any kinds of technologies, huge buildings

e.t.c

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etc

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according to

the sayings of experts

being

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like China or

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States of

America

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my country should work, build,

improve

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approximately

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20 years.

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majority of

locally

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people

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choose

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chose

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watch foreign

films

. There is

also

one huge problem

about

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with

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financial support. In

local

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the local

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area

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government

give

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not enough

money

for filming scenes. The organisers of

movies

find

money

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the money

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for

own

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their own

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films

, and

definitely

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it is not enough.

According to

the statistics of Kazakhstan in

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2022 year just over 80

percent

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people

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of people

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filmed for

own

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their own

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money

only

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for approximately 20

percent

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films

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of films

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government

gave

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money

Moreover

, because

movies

were

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historical, which is not interesting

rather

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but rather

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foreign.

Consequently

, if it

continue

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, in Kazakhstan there will not quite good

films

furthermore

the industry will not grow. In conclusion, there were reasons

about

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for

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foreign and

locally

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local

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films

. Taking everything mentioned into account in our final, analysis we can say that the

government

should support

industry

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the industry

an industry

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films

moreover

, organisers should film action,interesting

movies

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Two-part question Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. *Why could this be? *Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

The digram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country., while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and giye your opinion.

SOME COMPANIES SPONSOR SPORTS AS A WAY TO ADVERTISE THEMSELVES. SOME PEOPLE THINK IS GOOD, WHILE OTHERS THINK THERE ARE DISADVANTAGES TO THIS. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Two-part question Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?