Advertising is influencing people more and more. Is it a positive or negative trend?

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These days, we see advertising all the time either on the station, television or the internet. The impact of advertising on
people
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is growing. In my opinion,
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is a negative development, and the reasons will be elaborated on in the following paragraphs. One of the most concerning problems is that advertising can be controlled by
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company itself. They exaggerate what they include in the ads. Since
consumers
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' eyes are easily tricked. They are easily misled by misleading and attractive ad effects that
causes
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trouble later on. Take
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supplements that will help you slim down or make your skin younger.
Such
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a problem particularly concerns a part of teenagers who feel inferior in appearance and can easily be led into dangerous situations. Taking supplements
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of eating foods may be
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option that could be detrimental.
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,
people
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need smarter decisions before buying stuff.  Another issue is
consumers
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are actually paying the
price
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for the advertisements of products they buy.
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,
people
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shopping may even lead them to pay for the advertisement. I have
experienced
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working in a supermarket, and the store has sold items at an affordable
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by curtailing advertising.
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, it is interesting to note that the world-famous
Coca-cola's
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manufacturing cost is said to be only 5 cents, surprisingly. If companies curtailed
advertisement
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advertisements
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,
consumers
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can
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access products at a more affordable
price
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.
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,
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is not the case, so the trend is negative.
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,the exaggerated claims of adverts under the control of the companies themselves can bring danger to certain groups of
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.
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, if it
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too much for companies to do advertising, they intentionally pass the expense to the
consumers
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who do not know that they can access products at a reasonable
price
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.
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