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The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.
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The presented illustration depicts information about 4
difference
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different
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 social media sources and
most
Correct article usage
the most
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 time
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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spent on
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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 between 2010 and 6 years later. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, the highest used network was
facebook
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Facebook
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,
whereas
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, the
less
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least
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 used
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 LinkedIn and Twitter. It can be clearly seen that in 6 years social networking website Facebook was most popular with more than half, it is nearly 69 per cent,
moreover
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, with
value
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a value
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20
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of 20
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. It can be clearly observed that the smallest quantity of number (2) had two media services Twitter and LinkedId.
Furthermore
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, the percentage did not exceed 7. It is interesting to note that Other social platforms were on
its
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their
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 medium position with just over 17 per cent, and with number 5. By writing 9 my band was 4.5
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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