The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
The graph provides the
percentage
of public
transport
used by different
age
groups and
location
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locations
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of residence in 2016.
Overall
, large
city
residents
used public
transport
more than other
residents
. It can be clearly seen that almost 40% of big
city
residents
aged 0-15 used public
transport
while
only a minority of other
residents
did the same.
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there is a significant growth of public
transport
users among 16-45 year old large
city
residents
. Other
residents
of
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aged
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age
16-30 used public
transport
slightly more than other
residents
aged 31-45.
According to
the data there is a sharp decline
of
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the
percentage
between
age
groups of 31-45 and 61-75,
while
the
percentage
of other
residents
aged 31-45 and 46-60 using public
transport
stabilized at 15%. Other
residents
at
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aged
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age
61-75 are the only
age
group that used public
transport
more than large
city
residents
. After a fall
of
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the
percentage
of public
transport
users living in big
city
residences at
age
61-75, there is a minimal escalation,
while
the
percentage
of public
transport
using other
residents
slowly rose.
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