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The government money should be invested in teaching science rather than other subject so as to help the country make progress and develop. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #science #country #progress
It is claimed that
government
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 should put money into scientific
subjects
,
for making
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to make
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 students well-educated, in order to make them helpful for the
country
's growth. I disagree with
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, as all youngster should make
decision
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by
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on
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 their own.
Therefore
, it is not right to avoid teaching other
subjects
,
while
 focusing on scientific
subjects
such
 as chemistry, physics and etc. The following essay examines
negative
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the negative
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 sides of ignoring other
subjects
. To start with, science is an essential foundation of people's life background,
consequently
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 it has an
advantegous
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advantageous
 impact on the world.
Moreover
, it is not a true fact that scientific fields are only required fields for
country's
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a country's
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 development.
In other words
,
by
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focusing on technical
subjects
,
while
 ignoring other themes, will not lead to crucial changes in
nation's
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the nation's
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 progress
evalution
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evaluation
.
According to
 the statistics, biology scientists play
7
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a 7
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% role in the development of a certain area.
Additionally
, math is considered
as
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an
essetial
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essential
 tool for the
country
's prosperity, since all basic domestic usages are based on math theorems and rules.
Hence
, scientific
subjects
 come up with
significanse
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significance
significant
 in our lives,
however
 other
subjects
such
 as math
is
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major
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a major
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 factor
of
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in
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 our daily routine.
To sum up
, I do not agree with the statement about ignorance of other
subjects
, as all
subjects
 are
contributor
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contributors
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for
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to
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country's
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a country's
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 future.
Therefore
, in a certain grade students should make a decision
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fututre
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future
career
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,
as a result
 being divided into groups with
choosen
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chosen
subjects
.
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