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Band 4

You missed an international flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter: •Describe what happened that caused you to miss your flight • Explain how missing your flight impacted you • Clearly state what you would like the airline to do

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It is Sarvinoz,
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 year, On December 22, I get into the flight of 606, seating number 22. But, the Drivers of not pay attention,and
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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 missed flying. The reason cause of the missing, Suddenly,
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that I

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suddenly had a headache, So, I purchased tablets,
Moreover
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, my nephew got short of air. He behaved himself badly. After feeling
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apply

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relaxed and good, we decided to enter inside. In spite of arriving here on time. But, One of the airline's staff did not allow access.
This
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 impacts me to basic meetings between two companies.
As a result
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, Many people remain workless. If we had signed the contract, we would have made a huge profit.
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Most

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staffs
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staff

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 are too sad
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for

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 me. Now
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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 could not find or work out
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apply

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the situation. I am not thrilled
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with

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 your
unknowingly
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unknowing

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 work. I am writing that the airline must pay back my payment as fast as possible. Yours faithfully: Sarvinoz.

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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your letter is unclear. You should start with a proper introduction, then provide a clear description of what happened, explain the impact on you, and state your request.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are not appropriate for a formal letter. You should use 'Dear' followed by the airline's name and end with 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully'.
coherence cohesion
You have combined multiple ideas in some paragraphs. It is better to have one main idea per paragraph to improve clarity and coherence.
task achievement
You have not fully addressed all the points in the prompt. Make sure to clearly describe what happened, explain the impact on you, and state your request.
task achievement
Your writing tone is not suitable for a formal letter. Use more polite and formal language throughout the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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