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Being a celibrity –such as a famous film start or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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The line graphs illustrate how many
shops
 were opened and closed in a particular country over the period from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, there was un downward trend with considerable fluctuations in both categories.
In addition
, the biggest
number
 of openings
experienced
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 in 2011,
while
 the lowest point in closures was hit in 2015. Looking into the details, the
number
 of closed stores increased from 2012 to 2013, reaching the highest point of above 7000.
Nevertheless
, after
the
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 slight decline for one
year
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 the figures plunged to about 0 closures in 2015 and
then
 sharply jumped to around 5000 in 2016. Over the subsequent 3 years, the
number
 of closed
shops
 approximately
leveled
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 off with modest changes. When it comes to openings, during the first reviewed year their
number
 almost halved,
accounted
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 for below 4000
shops
 in 2012. The
greates
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greatest
 rise was witnessed from 2012 to 2014 when the figures gradually went up, making up approximately the same
number
 with closures at 6000
shops
 in 2014.
Additionally
, the trend of openings stabilized at
4000
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4,000
shops
 from 2015 to 2017, decreasing by almost
1000
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1,000
shops
 by
the
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2018.
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