You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 250 words.
In recent days , more and more
students
choose to study other subjects such
as commerce and business other than science
. I believe that fewer opportunities and lower salary
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salaries
compare
to other industries are the main reasons behind Wrong verb form
compared
this
phenomenon. In this
essay
I will go through those reasons in deep Add a comma
,essay
as well as
the effects of such
phenomenon
.
There are many reasons that cause Correct article usage
a phenomenon
less
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fewer
students
willing to take science
as major
. One of them is Correct article usage
a major
job
vacancy. Add an article
a job
While there
is Correct word choice
There
less job
available to Fix the agreement mistake
fewer jobs
science
graduate than other graduate such
as commerce. More students
are
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apply
therefore
choose to go for commerce or business units other than science
. Furthermore
, science related
jobs Add a hyphen
science-related
are usually have
lower Change the verb form
usually have
salary
than business sectors. Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
While
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Salary
salary
is one of the major factor
when deciding career. Change to a plural noun
factors
Thus
, less and less students
choose to study science
.
As a result
of reduced interest in science
education. It will lead to a shortage of individuals with expertise in science
, technology, engineering, and mathematics fields. This
skills gap can have negative impacts on industries that rely on these skills, such
as technology, healthcare, and engineering. In additon
, in a globalized world, countries that invest in Correct your spelling
addition
science
and technology tend to be more competitive. A decline in science
education may lead to a loss of competitiveness on the international stage.
In conclusion , students
choose not to study science
mainly due to
lack
of opportunities and low Correct article usage
a lack
salary
. With Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
less
and Correct quantifier usage
fewer
less
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fewer
science
graduate
, Fix the agreement mistake
graduates
the
society will Correct article usage
apply
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be suffered
suffered
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suffer
by
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from
shortage
of expertise in some areas and become less competitive.Add an article
a shortage
the shortage
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