The graphs below show data on Australian trades with three other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show data on Australian trades with three other countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graphs illustrate information about
Australia
’s level of
imports
and exports with
China
,
Japan
, and the United
States
from 2002 to 2008.
Overall
, it is readily apparent from the graphs that
Australia
exported more to the United
States
and
Japan
than that of its
imports
.
However
, the bilateral
trade
between
Australia
and
China
followed a different trend.
Although
Australia
’s
export
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to
Japan
began at 40 and remained stable until 2005,
it
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reached
the
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peak
61
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in 2006, followed by a steady decline to around 50 in 2008.
However
, when it comes to
trade
with the United
States
,
Australia
’s
export
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exports
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always remained double (40) than that of its
import
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imports
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(20) and stayed stable until 2006, when both
imports
and exports started rising gradually.
On the other hand
,
initially
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Australia
exported more (40) to
China
than that of its
imports
(30), and the
export
remained the dominant player until 2008 when the level of
import
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from
China
exceeded that of the
export
and kept rising
sharp
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. In fact,
this
bilateral
trade
surplus for
Australia
reached
at
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its maximum in 2005 when the amount of
import
plummeted to
the
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lowest point (20.)
Finally
, the
trade
with the United
States
was mostly stable with
a
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consistent
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higher
export
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exports
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, with
Japan
it went through an unstable
export
dominance, but in the end,
Australia
failed to restrain the steep rise of
import
from
China
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words imports, china, japan, states, australia, trade, export, import with synonyms.
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