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Describe a study (individual or at school) that you have done in one of the fields of: history, cultural studies, sociology/anthropology, or political science

I am interested in
people
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, society, and culture, and I have been self-studying primarily through online media about the lives of
people
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 in various regions, with a focus on food and eating habits.
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 includes local cuisine and the origins of specific dishes,
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 the lifestyles of fishermen, farmers, and livestock keepers in the present day. My emphasis is on understanding the village life of
people
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 in different habitats, especially in Japan, a country that I have
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particular interest in from the beginning.
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 interest originated from an opportunity I had to intern in France, where I
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 studied
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cultural diversity in management courses that emphasized collaboration among different cultures.
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 field of study, which I particularly enjoyed as a student, involved understanding the cultures of various countries and finding common ground in working together. Given that the tourism and hotel industry often involves interactions with
people
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 of diverse ethnicities, both among staff and customers, my interest in Japan has remained consistent as a foundation. In the past 4-5 years, I have had the opportunity to study in Japan,
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 enriching my experiences in
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 field.

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