Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves?

In today’s world,
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countries
such
as America, Germany and England are amazingly wealthy
while
people
in third world
countries
are suffering from poverty and many other related problems. So, it becomes a highly debatable issue whether it is the responsibility of
governments
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of those poor
nations
to help their citizens or
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whether the
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rich
countries
should share their wealth and resources
to
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them. It sounds reasonable that governments of poor
nations
are mainly responsible for improving the living status of their
people
. But for a country without any resources or investment, it would be very difficult to improve
the
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economic status without any help from other rich
nations
. If wealthy
nations
share a certain portion of their wealth
to
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the poor
nations
, it will be a great help to initiate new businesses and
investment
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investments
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for
a
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poor
nation
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nations
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.
Moreover
, the basic needs of a country
such
as education and health can be filled up by donation of medicines and teaching materials.
On the other hand
, some
people
argue that sharing of wealth and donations of
the
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basic needs to poor
nations
is not a real help. Because all these can easily be used up in a short time and no
long term
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benefits might be expected.
In addition
, it is not sure
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that
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whether
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the financial support is going into investment for
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the country’s
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country’s
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business or it is lost in corruption, a common problem in developing and underdeveloped
countries
. So, they suggest that
instead
of material and monetary supply, wealthy
nations
should better help poor
countries
with technology and expert skills.
For example
, they should send
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expert
technician
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technicians
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or professionals to developing
countries
to teach them advanced technology which can improve their business and lifestyle.
Furthermore
, young
people
from poor
nations
should be sponsored by prosperous
nations
for
further
educations
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education
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. In short, a combination of technology and trained efficient young professionals can build up the
long term
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economic status of the country. In summary, as it is impossible for the governments of poor
nations
to help the citizens on their own,
any
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and
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supply for
short
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the short
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term or long run from the rich would be a very valuable help for them.
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