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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves?

#nations #wealth #food #education #responsibility #governments #citizen
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In today’s world,
industrialises
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countries
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such
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 as America, Germany and England are amazingly wealthy
while
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people
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 in third world
countries
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 are suffering from poverty and many other related problems. So, it becomes a highly debatable issue whether it is the responsibility of
governments
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the governments
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 of those poor
nations
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 to help their citizens or
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whether the
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 rich
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 should share their wealth and resources
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 them. It sounds reasonable that governments of poor
nations
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 are mainly responsible for improving the living status of their
people
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. But for a country without any resources or investment, it would be very difficult to improve
the
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 economic status without any help from other rich
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. If wealthy
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 share a certain portion of their wealth
to
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 the poor
nations
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, it will be a great help to initiate new businesses and
investment
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investments
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 for
a
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apply
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poor
nation
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nations
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.
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, the basic needs of a country
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 as education and health can be filled up by donation of medicines and teaching materials.
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, some
people
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 argue that sharing of wealth and donations of
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basic needs to poor
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 is not a real help. Because all these can easily be used up in a short time and no
long term
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 benefits might be expected.
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, it is not sure
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whether
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that
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whether
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 the financial support is going into investment for
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the country’s
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country’s
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the country’s
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 business or it is lost in corruption, a common problem in developing and underdeveloped
countries
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. So, they suggest that
instead
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 of material and monetary supply, wealthy
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 should better help poor
countries
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 with technology and expert skills.
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, they should send
the
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expert
technician
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technicians
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 or professionals to developing
countries
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 to teach them advanced technology which can improve their business and lifestyle.
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, young
people
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 from poor
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 should be sponsored by prosperous
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 for
further
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educations
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education
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. In short, a combination of technology and trained efficient young professionals can build up the
long term
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 economic status of the country. In summary, as it is impossible for the governments of poor
nations
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 to help the citizens on their own,
any
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and
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 supply for
short
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the short
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 term or long run from the rich would be a very valuable help for them.
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