The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governtments should invest funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement

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runners are spending lots of money in the fields of arts, drama and music.
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, the government can utilize
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money for the improvement of buses , national banks etcetera. I ,
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,disagree with the latter as the promotion of a nation's culture
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, as well as the awareness of social issues,
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the awareness of social issues are possible
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the fields of cinema and numerous art forms only. To initiate , films and series native to a
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are made on the basis of the prevalence of a particular culture . A famous short film of
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, The Bulbul ,was set up in the era of the nineteenth century ,where males ruled predominately. It showed the painful issue of dowry
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marital rape and the latter was not talked about openly. But after its release,
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movie created havoc not only in
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worldwide. The oppressed ladies came out openly, arranged rallies and started asking for justice and it was reported that many got the same too.
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, spending a handsome amount of money in the field of music by promoting it through famous artists fetches viewers from every corner of the world. To illustrate , a famous music carnival of
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held in Delhi every year attracts millions of listeners not only from
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but
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from around the globe ,which directly adds to the economy of the province. Not only
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promotes tourism as visitors would travel to famous locations of the
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like The Taj Mahal and the Golden Temple.
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, benefitting the organisers ,the singers as well and the government in the form of taxes.
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, artistic fields like jazz,classics ,bhangra , and dramas are pivotal for a
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because they bring laurels to the
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making it famous among its contemporaries and playing a leading role in the growth of a region.
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