You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter •Describe the training course you want to do •Explain what the company could do to help you • Say how the course will be useful for your job

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Dear Mr. Najafi My name is Mrs. Sara Zare and I have been employed by your Iranian

company

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for five years. Currently, I am working as an interior manager in the department of interior design of office buildings, in the head office of Tehran. I am writing

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regardind

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regarding

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apply

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your advice about

peomoting

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promoting

firm

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the firm

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computers facilities,

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yesterday

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recieved

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received

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by mail which connected to our

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company

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It was very useful in my job. In fact, it is about networking offices system, a well-known professor teaches computer networking and is going to be held at Tehran University for three months from 14 to 18 p.m. and that cost is 250 dollars each month. With

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modern knowledge, I could have more access to

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staff development projects ferthermoe employees can avoid repetitive tasks,

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leaving more time for essential activities.

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, managers will be able to observe the project step by step. Since

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software is really up to date, the firms need to provide modern computers and unique equipment to operate

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networking. So, I need time off to attend

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training course and it is

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necessary for the

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to hire a computer expert to set up a nationwide network of computers. I attached

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advertisement, if you have any questions about promoting my branch just reply. Your Sinserly. SARA ZARE

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: <4

3.5

Logical structure

2.5

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: <4

3.5

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

231 words

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