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You were doing a short course at another country. All of a sudden, you had to leave the course and fly back to your home country. Write a letter to your teacher, and in your letter – express your gratitude – explain why you had to leave – explain what part of the course you enjoyed the most

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Dear Mr Warner, I am writing to inform you that I will not be able to complete a crash course in machine learning at our institute.
Due to
 some unavoidable reasons, I left Australia for my hometown in India.
Firstly
, I would like to express my satisfaction with the program I attended under your guidance.
Furthermore
, I would love to give my thanks to you and the other staff of the institution who helped me throughout the learning phase.
However
, all of a sudden, I am dropping
this
 course in the middle, because in my hometown, my grandfather has passed away, and I am the only heir of his business here.
As a result
, I need to take charge of daily operations at my office. Admittedly, I will miss the practical sessions and interactive way of completing the provided examples. Definitely, the question-answer sessions on Fridays were my favourite part of the course followed by the practicals. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ravindra Rajole
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coherence cohesion
Organize your points in a clear and logical manner. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea.
coherence cohesion
Revise the greeting and closing of the letter to make it more appropriate.
task achievement
You need to provide more specific reasons for leaving the course.
task achievement
Expand on what you enjoyed about the course and include examples or specific details.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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