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Band 3

The two maps show a park in 2010 and in 2016.

The two maps show a park in 2010 and in 2016.
The two pictures display typical differences
of
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 Milton Park in 2010 and the present 2016. In general, over the time
period
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 the natural spaces have been changed from North to South. In 2010 the park had
a
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huge fields on the north-western,
however
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, the fields have been reconstructed
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as playground
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playground
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playgrounds
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 and picnic
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area
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areas
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 to serve outdoor activities for citizens in 2016.
Moreover
Linking Words
, a mini golf has been built below a new path from the main path on the
north-eastern
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northeastern
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 to separate
with
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from
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 other areas.
Next,
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in 2016 a wood
area
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also
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has been
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declined to create an adventure play
area
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.
However
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, the
last
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 important
changes
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change
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 are pond has been expanded to be a boating lake in
this
Linking Words
area
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.
Besides
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, a new ice cream shop and toy shop near that place have been built, they are on the other side of the path, opposite with café.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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