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Travel from and to work is becoming more difficult. One solution is that employers should allow employees to work at home. Do you agree that the advantages are more than disadvantages?

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The line graphs provide data on the proportion of
households
 with electrical
equipments
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equipment
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 and the
number
 of
hours
 per week spent on
the
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housework in a specific country over the period from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, there was an upward trend in three kinds of appliances which
households
 started to own,
while
 their time spent doing
houseworks
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housework
 gradually decreased. Looking into the details, in 1920, 40% and 30% of
households
 had already had a washing machine and a vacuum cleaner, respectively. By 1940, from 50% to 60% of families
possess
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 a washing machine, a vacuum cleaner or a fridge. Over the subsequent 40 years, the
number
 of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners steadily increased, resulting in all
households
had
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 these appliances from 2000 to 2019.
By contrast
, the figures
of
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a
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washing
machine
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machines
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 fluctuated around 70% from 1960 to 2019, reaching the highest point at above 70%
at the end
 of the reviewed period. Regarding the
number
 of
houseworks
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housework
hours
, from 1920 to 1960 families considerably reduced their
spendings
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spending
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 on house duties from 50
hours
 to 20
hours
 in 1960. For the following 79 years, there was witnessed a downward trend, with a short stabilization at around 15
hours
 from 1980 to 2000. Eventually, the
number
 of
hours
 per week hit
the
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 lowest point at approximately 10 in 2019.
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