i. #Globalization | #ForeignTrade - Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? (IELTS 10, AC)

I strongly believe that
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academy is best suited for me because
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educational institution has provided the world’s best education.
This
academy gives priority mainly to Study, Health and well-being. Even though, all the information provided on the educational institution's website is very clear everyone can understand it very easily.
Additionally
,
this
university provides various facilities like Campus facilities, Sports and Fitness, Student support and accommodation.
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,
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university provides various courses
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and games
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and healthcare
courses.
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The essay does not directly address the question prompt about globalization and its impact on countries becoming more similar.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion of the essay are vague and do not provide a clear overview of the main argument.
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coherence cohesion
The essay structure is not well-organized and lacks coherence in presenting the main points.
grammatical range accuracy
There are several grammatical errors and awkward sentence constructions throughout the essay.
lexical resource
The essay lacks a strong lexical resource and could benefit from incorporating more varied vocabulary.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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