Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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schools should not Use synonyms
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pay income tax and Unnecessary verb
apply
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government
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the government
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children
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further
justification will come in Linking Words
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amounts
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school
should not pay any Fix the agreement mistake
schools
taxes
there are several reasons behind Use synonyms
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, they already contribute Linking Words
in
their Change preposition
to
country
economy because they pay Change noun form
country's
high
amount of Correct article usage
a high
money
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in
only education system which is beneficial for all Change preposition
for
the
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apply
sector
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sectors
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school
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they
pay Correct pronoun usage
apply
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apply
money
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school
which Use synonyms
directely
goes to the administration and help Correct your spelling
directly
country
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the country
growth
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grow
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money
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school
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also
pay Linking Words
taxes
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government
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take
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takes
taxes
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school
earn Correct article usage
the school
money
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parents
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apply
taxes
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other form
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it
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which
parents
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not
required to pay any Add a missing verb
are not
taxes
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government
.
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, as per the Linking Words
goverment
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government
policy
all citizens need to pay Add a comma
policy,
taxes
to the administration because it is their choice Use synonyms
wheather
their Correct your spelling
whether
children
study in Use synonyms
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a govenrment
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government
school
or Use synonyms
private
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a private
school
. Use synonyms
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government
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already
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has already
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many Replace the word
opened
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school
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schools
free
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is free
provide
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apply
in
public Change preposition
to
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school
.
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children
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parents
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do no
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not
taxes
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government
because they already pay in advance. Use synonyms
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government
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rule
all citizens need to pay Add a comma
rule,
taxes
.Use synonyms
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