Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?
Nowadays
art
plays a significant role in society. It is often argued that art
should be taught at schools
while
others believe that focusing on main subjects
would be better to
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for
children
progress.
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children's
Firstly
, schools
should cover all subjects
in order to outgrow open minded
population. To be more specific, every subject has its own importance which can Correct word choice
open-minded
led
to magnificent progress. It is observed that detecting talent sometimes can Change the verb form
lead
be appear
just by inspiration Change the verb form
appear
by
a teacher especially if it is a Change preposition
from
favorite
one for students. Change the spelling
favourite
Additionally
, who
are good at Correct determiner usage
those who
art
are considered as
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apply
a
gifted people by God. As an obvious example, average statistics show that some humans are good at expressing themselves via Correct article usage
apply
art
rather than by using a language. So, first
step of education starts at school as well there have to Change the article
the first
educated
not only main Add a missing verb
be educated
subjects
but also
other subjects
namely art
, music etc.
On the other hand
, generally
pupils are examined by more important Add a comma
generally,
subjects
such
as math, English, chemistry and so on. To be more precise, higher education’s admission process is conducted through the exam which is based on more academic knowledge than art
. Therefore
, parents sometimes can encourage their kids to focus on necessary subjects
, however
, it does not mean than
they should be avoided from Correct word choice
that
art
completely. Schools
and other education centers
should provide Change the spelling
centres
with
all spheres of Change preposition
apply
learning
process.
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the learning
To sum up
, I strongly support that art
should be taught and encouraged at all kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
schools
and courses. It is proven that art
can ignite a light in person’s
life and motivate Correct article usage
a person’s
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them for
for doing
their best in all stages of life.Change preposition
to do
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