Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

Nowadays

art

plays a significant role in society. It is often argued that

art

should be taught at

schools

while

others believe that focusing on main

subjects

would be better

to

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children

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progress.

Firstly

,

schools

should cover all

subjects

in order to outgrow open

minded

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population. To be more specific, every subject has its own importance which can

led

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to magnificent progress. It is observed that detecting talent sometimes can

be appear

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just by inspiration

by

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a teacher especially if it is a

favorite

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one for students.

Additionally

,

who

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those who

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are good at

art

are considered

as

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a

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gifted people by God. As an obvious example, average statistics show that some humans are good at expressing themselves via

art

rather than by using a language. So,

first

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step of education starts at school as well there have to

educated

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not only main

subjects

but

also

other

subjects

namely

art

, music etc.

On the other hand

,

generally

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pupils are examined by more important

subjects

such

as math, English, chemistry and so on. To be more precise, higher education’s admission process is conducted through the exam which is based on more academic knowledge than

art

.

Therefore

, parents sometimes can encourage their kids to focus on necessary

subjects

,

however

, it does not mean

than

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they should be avoided from

art

completely.

Schools

and other education

centers

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should provide

with

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all spheres of

learning

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the learning

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process.

To sum up

, I strongly support that

art

should be taught and encouraged at all

kind

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of

schools

and courses. It is proven that

art

can ignite a light in

person’s

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a person’s

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life and motivate

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for doing

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their best in all stages of life.