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Some university students want to learn about their subjects in addition to main subiects. Other believe it is more important to give all their time and attentions to studying for qualitications. Discuss both these views and giving your opinion.

#university #students #subjects #addition #subiects #time #attentions #qualitications
Some of the
university
students
 have
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 to get acquire
knowledge
to
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subjects
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pro
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 to
main
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field
.
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argue that it is much paramount to present all the
time
 and intentions to studying for modifications. In
this
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,I will discuss both views and give you my own opinion. First of all, today most of
generation
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, that studying in the
university
field
 wants to gain
knowledge
 about other
subjects
 that can increase their acquire
skills
 ,boost their confidence
level
, making decisions after picking points as compared to main
subjects
 that can
inspired
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 your for your gaining
skills
.
For instance
,If you want to become successful in way of career and achievement
then
 work hard and get
knowledge
 in each subject.
Thats
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That
 why, it is much advantageous that
university
field
students
 want to make their path good in
way
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their way
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 of learning if they want to learn other
subjects
 as compared to
mains
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main
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subjects
.
Furthermore
, the most paramount thing is
that
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to pay all
attentions
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attention
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 and focus on their
time
 that can come
onlv
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only
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attentive
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on
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 studying
level
 to become proficient in adaption. Because
of
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, career growth
have play
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 a major role in
the
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studying life, where you will manage the
time
 and path to
right
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 directory for
qualification
.
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,
qualification
 always
make
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an
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 good impact on your future
skills
 and
change
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 your goals to become professional in your
field
.
Thus
, the major thing is to provide all the
time
 and attention to studying for your
qualification
 to make your
level
 good. In my opinion,I agree
that
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 both views that
university
students
 have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to learn
advance
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subjects
as well as
 main
subjects
 to get
skills
 and
knowledge
.
In addition
, the
students
 have given all their
time
 frame and intention to studying to get degree and
qualification
.
To conclude
advance
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students
wants
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want
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 to learn other
subjects
in contrast
of
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to
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 main
subjects
 because of getting
skills
.
Other
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give
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gives
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 importance to pay attention
on
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to
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 studying for their
qualification
due to
 career
level
.
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