In many countries, governments prioritize economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

In a lot of nations, the state makes the economic development as its top priority. Whilst it is true to say that economic revive might play a pivotal role in
nation's
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growth, it is, simultaneously, could lead to dire consequences. I
dopt
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adopt
the stance that
decision makers
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should take into their
considerations
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consideration
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the indirect negative impact of
such
a strategy.
To begin
with, focusing on
fiscal
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side of matters could play an indispensable role in the
independency
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independence
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of that country and in
flourishing
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the flourishing
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the
labor
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market.
In other words
, fortifying the economic sector lures
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foreign companies to invest and create numerous projects and,
accordingly
, subsequent job
apportunities
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opportunities
. A prime example of
this
is Dubai, after the economic remodelling, which has taken place in the
last
ten years, a large number of
multinationals
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multinational
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corporations
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compete
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competes
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with each other to spread and expand their businesses there.
This
example shows that not only economic reviving important for the nation's sovereignty, but
also
it makes citizens more prosperous.
Nevertheless
, despite the above-mentioned benefit, it can still assumed that excessive concentration on one sector will affect the other ones. To illustrate, if the financial department is the authorities' main concern, other branches,
such
as the healthcare and educational systems, will suffer from
neglaction
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neglect
.
For instance
, in Iraq about two-thirds of
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populace
depend
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depends
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completely on
the
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free healthcare services, and ignoring
this
department could cause a severe shortage in providing appropriate medical services.what can be said here is that authorities should endeavor to endorse all the initiatives to tackle
this
issue and
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into their accounts all other important sectors. In conclusion,
after
this
essay has reiterated the above-mentioned merits and demerits, it can be claimed that
although
strong
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economy can strengthen the country's standing in the international schemes, different problems might emerge. I am of the belief that
such
an issue must urgently
address
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be addressed
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by both society and government.
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