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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: thank them for the photos and for the holidays explain why you didn't write earlier invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear Annie and Sanam, Hope you
both
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 are well. I'
m
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 writing
this
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 to thank you
both
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 for the picture and definitely for the
trip
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. First of all, thanks a lot for the vacation and
specially
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 for the picture. Yesterday, I saw all the pictures, and I was feeling that I was reliving those days.
Also
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, the one which we all took in front of
Eiffel
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 Tower, I'll definitely frame it for my bedroom's wall. I'
m
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 really sorry for not writing a letter after I came back. As you know, I took
a long holidays
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a long holiday
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 from my office, which is why
I'd
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I had
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a
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plenty of tasks pending, and my manager told me to complete all
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of that
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that
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them
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 within a week. So I was a busy bee
from
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for
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last
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 1 week. Plus, next month I'
m
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 planning a
trip
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 to Kashmir, which I know is
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 Annie's dream destination. So why don't you
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 join me? It's a
week long
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trip
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, and I'
m
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 hiring three Royal Enfield bikes. I reckon
,
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 it'll be a fun
trip
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 with a lot of adventurous roads. Hoping to see you
both
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 soon. Best regards, Jaskaran
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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