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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to take time off work give details of the amount of time you need suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

#company #time #work #manager #amount
Dear Mr Gill, I am writing
this
 to grant me leave for a
week
due to
 an exigency in my family. I am Jaskaran Singh Awal, from cash team. My
grand mother
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is
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 suffering from
a
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cardiovascular disease
from
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last
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 2
year
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. Yesterday,
doctor
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 said that she
needs
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 to get operated
with
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 a
week
 so that her health would not get
detroited
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deteriorated
further
. I need
a
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off for two
week
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thus
 after her operation I
would
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 be able to take care of her. Since my parents live abroad
so
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I am the only one who would be taking care of her.
Further
,
doctor
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 said that at least one person should be with her
till
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 one
week
.
Furthermore
, for my daily tasks, I have assigned Aditi and she
had
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confirmed that she would take care of it.
Moreover
, we have month-end within a
week
, and
thus
, she
had
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also
 confirmed that she will send the journal entries to you. Awaiting your prompt reply. Yours Sincerely, Jaskaran Singh Awal
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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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