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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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The diagram illustrates the expenses in the health sector in relation to the Gross Domestic
product
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 in 12 different nations in
the
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Europe over 3 various years: 2002, 2007 and 2012. It is immediately apparent that the majority of countries increased their spending
in
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 health projects whilst only one country reduced the amount channelled to
this
 area
To begin
 with, the expenditure for Switzerland, Belgium, Spain and Estonia remained unchanged over the 3 different years. Whilst Switzerland spent the highest at 11%, Estonia
by contrast
 invested the least at 3%. Belgium
on the other hand
 fell
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 second place using 10%
whereas
 Spain invested 2% less than
this
 figure. With regards to
Slovania
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Slovenia
Slovakia
, Poland, Norway, Lithuania and Denmark, these countries increased their funds for the health sector in 2012. Interestingly, their 2002 spending was the same as that for 2007 for each of these 5 countries.
However
, the Netherlands and Luxembourg saw a decline in the income for health-related issues in 2012. Meanwhile, France started off at 10% in 2002,
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 rise in 2007 only to fall to 9% in 2012.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Current health expenditure: The amount of money spent on healthcare services and products at present.
  • - Percentage of GDP: The proportion of the Gross Domestic Product (the total value of goods and services produced in a country) allocated to health expenditure.
  • - Main features: The most important characteristics or aspects.
  • - Overall: In general; considering everything.
  • - Surpassed: Exceeded; went beyond.
  • - Decline: A decrease or reduction.
  • - Fluctuation: An irregular rise and fall; variation.
  • - Comparisons: The act of examining similarities and differences between two or more things.
  • - Largest increase: The greatest growth or rise.
  • - Most fluctuation: The highest degree of variation or instability.
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