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Some people think universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are different
views
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 present
realted
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related
 to the acceptance rate in universities of the students on the basis of their gender in every subject. One group of
peoples
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people
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 believe that
equal
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an equal
the equal
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number
 of male and female students should be selected for every subject
while
on the contrary
 other believes
otherwise
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I
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i
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I
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 will discuss both of their
views
 and give my own opinion
abouth
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about
this
 matter. Persons who believe that equal
oppertunities
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opportunities
 should be provided for all genders in every field of study,
they
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apply
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provide the reasons for that. First of all, they demand that crystal clear selection procedure like
open
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an open
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marite
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marine
maritime
 base system. In which all will get the same chance to fight for the positions and
in
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as
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result
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a result
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 the most intelligent one beside his/her sex
win
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wins
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 the seat. The other reason for
same
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the same
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number
 is women will provide the building blocks for the
developement
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development
 of
nation
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the nation
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 if they are well educated.
This
 will only be possible if they receive the same
number
 of
seats
 as their counterparts.
On the other hand
, Individuals who have different
openion
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opinion
opinions
 justified their stance with the following reasons. They
belive
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believe
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 that as the population is on hike and in developing
conutries
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countries
 there are not enough universities
who
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that
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 are providing quality education. In all these countries
mens
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means
men's
men
 are
on
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in
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 the driving
seats
 of
economy
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the economy
an economy
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 not only in their house but
also
 whole in the country. If the women got
the
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apply
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more no of
seats
then
their
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there
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will
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would
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 be
less
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fewer
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oppertunity
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opportunity
 for
mens
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men
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 and
results
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resulting
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 in a disaster
at
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in
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 the end. So, they are on the side of thinking who have
a
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apply
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stong
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strong
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views
 about the superiority of men. In my opinion,
female
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females
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 should be allowed in equal numbers as
male
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males
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 but not in every course. There are some specific subjects where both
gender
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genders
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 can
works
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work
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will
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at will
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 equal pace
as
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for
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an
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apply
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example
designing
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design
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, management and
doctor
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doctoring
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. In all of these
fields
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,fields
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 they have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to
paticipate
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participate
along with
 their opposite sex. But
their
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there
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 are some fields of study where more
musculine
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masculine
 power is needed
as
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for
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an
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apply
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example construction and
industries related
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industries-related
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 subjects, for all of these types no need
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for femeline
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femeline
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feminine
feeling
feline
 at all. In conclusion, it is stated that
their
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there
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 are contradict
views
are
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apply
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present in
general
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the general
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 population. Both have their thoughts and reasons for that. I will be more justified if
number
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a number
the number
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 of
seats
 should be announced on the basis of needs, as if
this
more
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is more
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 related to women
then
 they should
be prioritise
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be prioritised
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 and
mens
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men
 where they
required
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require
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 most.
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