some people believe that the fittest and strongest individuals and team always succeed in sports .others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Human civilization believes both individuals and
team
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teams
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who have a strong and fit
in
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physique tend to
successful
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be successful
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in playing
sports
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.
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, people assume fruitfulness in
sports
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depends on mental
behaviors
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.
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, from my point of view, I believe those several assumptions in society are beneficial for the glory of
sports
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. First and foremost, it is important to have good physical health
while
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playing
sports
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especially
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the
games
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which need more energy and effort
such
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as rock climbing, boxing, football, and so on.
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,
recently
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I watched
volleyball
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a volleyball
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match a month ago and I saw the player
need
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to have a strong body to be able
deflect
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the ball from the opponent.
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support of the team really helps them to boost their energy
while
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playing the
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.
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, the effect of mental attitudes is no less important than
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having
strongest
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the strongest
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and fittest body. It can be seen
from
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people who are always positive thinking tend to win in all aspects, and
sports
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are no exception.
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, athletes
while
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playing the match always believe they will
success
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in the
games
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. Most of the players remind themselves to never think of failure because it can have a bad impact on their performance.
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, there are many methods for both individuals and teams to
success
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in
sports
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. It has been proven
by
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that
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having the fittest and strongest body can
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a
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the
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chance
to win
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of winning
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in
the
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games
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.
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, if people do not implement mental attitudes
on
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in
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themselves,
nor
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is there
any
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no
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point in hoping for victory.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitive edge
  • determination
  • focus
  • resilience
  • cooperation
  • strategic planning
  • physically demanding
  • performance
  • technological advancements
  • facilities
  • expert guidance
  • attributes
  • endurance
  • teamwork
  • communication
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