In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society?

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The increasing of life expectancy has both
advantanges
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advantages
and disadvantages for individuals and
society
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. As for individuals, I think advantages are more than disadvantages. When
people
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live longer, they get more time to
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achieve
their goals. They don't have to
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all things up only in
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"prime" time,
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they get options to achieve different goals
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diffrent
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different
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when they are older and older, they will be satisfied with slowing down the pace to enjoy life. But they
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have to face
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their own difficulties different from their ancestors. They need to deal with different physical and mental problems
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been found before.
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, they need to learn to get
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longliness
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loneliness
, because their children may be busy with their career, family and life for a longer time. For
society
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, challenges come first. The rate of the old will be bigger, it brings about pressure. They are not as effective as the young to contribute to the
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. Meanwhile, they require larger
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medical
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from the government. The good side is old
people
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can pass on their wisdom to the young, through
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way they can benefit
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society
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. And with more and more importance we attach to the old,
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will be more empathetic about the old. The atmosphere of
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will be that
people
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are always willing to help and care
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • developed world
  • problems
  • increasing
  • burden
  • healthcare systems
  • financial strain
  • aging population
  • workforce
  • social and emotional challenges
  • age-related diseases
  • long-term care
  • retirement
  • pension systems
  • social welfare programs
  • accessible transportation
  • housing
  • social and community services
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