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The bar chart compares female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.

The bar chart compares female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.
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the bar chart matches non works female rates in the four
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UK
uk
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UK
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 countries the
england
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 ,wales,
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scotland
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 and
northern ireland
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Northern Ireland
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in
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years
 2013 and 2014
overall
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most
of
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joblessness was in
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england
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 in 2013 ,
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northern irland was
depanded
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depended
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female
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females
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2013
firestly
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, in the year 2013, the peak of
female
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females
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 without jobs was in the
uk
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UK
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 6.8% , after that
in
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the
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scotland
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was the least
number
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non work
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female
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females
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during
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at 5.4% ,
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noticed
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rose in the
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 by 6.3% unemployment .
however
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number
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femal
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female
 joblessness was 5.6% in the
nothern
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northern
ireland
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.
secondly
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, in the year 2014, the
nothern
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northern
 ireland was the least
number
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non work
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female
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4.6% , next female without
job
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wales ,
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england
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of female unemployment was been at 6.5 % . the most
number
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female
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words scotland, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • female unemployment rates
  • four countries of the UK
  • 2013
  • 2014
  • introduce
  • overview
  • describe
  • summarize
  • observations
  • comments
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