The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given scheme gives information about the outcomes of research where individuals were asked why they relocated to a capital
city
of some country between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the main reason was a job,
whereas
the least common cause for moving to a bigger
city
was the need for
adventures
Fix the agreement mistake
adventure
show examples
.
In addition
, throughout the whole given ,period the trend concerning those who travelled because of adventure plateaued.
Initially
, the number of
people
who abandoned their homes
due to
better education constituted approximately 25,000 students,
however
since
this
time and by the end of the observed timeline the figure had been increasing considerably. From 2000 to 2005, there were similar patterns regarding the situation of individuals who moved to a bigger
city
because of family or friends, and adventure, which made up 10,000
people
each. In 2005, there was a modest growth in the number of
people
who moved because of their loved ones and by 2015 it constituted about 25,000
people
, which was more than three times as many as the number of those who moved to the capital
city
due to
employment and studying during the same year. Meanwhile, there were identical figures concerning the two latter reasons for moving to another
city
, which made up roughly 85,000 workers and pupils.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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