the tables below give information about sales of fairtraide labelled bananas and coffee

the tables below give information about sales of fairtraide labelled bananas and coffee
The table
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demonstrates
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to us data about sales of
fairtraide
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fairtrade
fair trade
labelled bananas and
coffee
.
Overall
, for
cofee
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coffee
2004th
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year
is
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more
succesful
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successful
than 1999, if we compare it with
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the banana
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banana
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bananas
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. In
fact
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coffees
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sales advanced to
the
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all
country
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countries
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,
while
banana's
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sales in Belgium and Sweden decreased.
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,
banana
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bananas
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bring
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to
UK
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three times more than
previous
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year,
whereas
coffee's
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an
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increase
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more almost 15 times. Next
coffee
salers Switzerland doubled their result from
previous
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year and have 6
million
euros
.
Also
banana
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bananas
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have
a
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same result 5.5
million
euros
, but progress is impressive since
in
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start
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they sold only
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euros
. Subsequent countries which
sale
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coffee
increased, despite their lower income. Denmark, Belgium and Sweden have two, one point seven and one
million
euros
respectively. For bananas only Denmark's income climbed up, meanwhile Belgium and Sweden dropped down. In conclusion in
UK
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the most popular
coffee
and
banana
trade. Others need to pay more attention to be like him
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade labeled
  • bananas
  • coffee
  • time period
  • trends
  • influence
  • consumers
  • farmers
  • communities
  • increase
  • products
  • labelling
  • sustainable
  • ethically sourced
  • global market
  • demand
  • awareness
  • certification
  • marketing strategies
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