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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued by some that enhancing the quality of people’s
lives
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 should be the main objective of
scientists
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. In my opinion,
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 it is important to improve
human’s
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life
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, there are still other aspects of
life
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 that equally need to be improved. On the
one
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 hand, indeed, trying to achieve better qualities to promote human
life
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 can have a profound impact on society. A lot of
scientists
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 have been striving to find solutions for diseases that are
completaly
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completely
 incurable. They have even found technology and treatment for cancer that was impossible to cure decades ago. If
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 treatments for many illnesses continue to be found, people’s
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 expectancy will
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 increase to a great degree.
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result
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 people start living in a perfect world which is full of high- standards.
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,
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 of the main aims of
scientists
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 should be improving our environment. If they focus on bettering the environmental conditions, it
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 affects people's
lives
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 positively. To be more precise, different environmental problems
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 as air pollution, global warming or climate change need improving. By doing
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, the
lives
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 of individuals can still be enhanced as it is crucial for human
well- being
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well-being
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.
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, air pollution, which is
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 of the
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real-life
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life
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 threats in today’s world, leads to numerous respiratory problems, especially in non-smog-free cities. In conclusion, despite the fact that people’s
lives
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 should be the main goal of
scientists
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, it is essential to recognize the relationship between human well-being and the environment. researchers should not overlook
one
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 of these important aspects and take every possible action to address the problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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