Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think this is a good thing for the world of sports. Other think this has disadvantages. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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day,
sports
sponsored by
companies
is
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a good way to
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them. Some people think
this
is a good
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thing
for the world of
sports
,
while
others don’t .I believe that positive
effect
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will outcome the disadvantages
depend
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on how
companies
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to
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companies
. On the one hand,
sports
sponsoring help raise a fund to support
for
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arranging
sports
events
as well as
tickets for participants which cost highly.
Secondly
, the higher amount of money
sports
events
gain
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the higher tax they have to pay
forr
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to
the government which can be used for public services.
finally
,
sports
sponsoring
help
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companies
increase their reputation and
good
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is good
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for their business.
On the other hand
, there can be some problems
such
as
:
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sports
sponsoring
is
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being
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highly
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cost and that might be the downside for many
companies
.
Furthermore
,
sports
events
and competitions are the places
sell
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that sell
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product
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products
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that relate to the
events
,
these product
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this product
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can
have
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poor quality and
unhealthy
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to
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for
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people who buy them, especially
for
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young people. In conclusion,
sports
sposoring
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sponsoring
have
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has
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both positive and negative
out come
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outcome
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.
However
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it depends on
companies
’ attitude and sportmanship.
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