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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,
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The chart provides information
of
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air
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 pollution from different sources in the UK between 1990 to 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total amount of
air
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pollutants
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 was significantly decreased over
this
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 period. The most
air
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pollutants
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 had been emitted from industry activities
while
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 the least emission was released from individual households. In 1990, the total amount of
air
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pollutants
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 in the UK was around 7
million
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tonnes
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 and the highest
number
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 was produced from industry activities about 5.5
million
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tonnes
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. A similar
number
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 was released from transport and households below 1
million
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tonnes
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. After
that
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 the total
number
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 had
been
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considerably decreased to 4
million
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tonnes
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 in 1999 and dropped to around 3
million
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tonnes
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 in 2005. A significant decline
of
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air
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pollutants
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 occurred from industry which dropped to 2
million
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tonnes
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 in 2005.
The transportation
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 had
stable
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a stable
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number
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 during the period.
Although
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 the
number
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 from households was unchanged in the first three years which was similar
with
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 transport,
but
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it was
closed
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close
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 to zero in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, million, tonnes, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • sources
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • significant
  • transport sector
  • industry
  • regulations
  • cleaner technologies
  • domestic heating
  • agriculture
  • overtaken
  • time frame
  • comparison
  • conclusion
  • predicting
  • sulphur dioxide (SO2)
  • nitrogen oxides (NOx)
  • particulate matter (PM)
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