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: The charts below show the number of registered road vehicles in use in a European country in 1996 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

: The charts below show the number of registered road vehicles in use in a European country in 1996 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The provided bar chart illustrates the
amount
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 of registered
road
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vehicles
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 in use in different European countries in 1996 and 2006.
Overall
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, the majority of travel per individual by
road
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vehicles
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 in 1996 and 2006 was in Denmark.
While
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,
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 the UK had at least of travel per individual by
road
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vehicles
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 in 1996 and 2006. It is apparent that Denmark was the most travelled by
road
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transportation
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 in the years 1996 and 2006, followed by Italy in the second order, Spain, Germany, France and the least travelled by
road
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vehicles
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 was the UK.
Similarly
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, the number of registered
road
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transportation
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 in use in The EU average the same
amount
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 as Germany and Spain.
In addition
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, the
amount
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 of registered
road
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transportation
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 used in Denmark was the highest in
years
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the years
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 1996 and 2006, with the figure being 3,000
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per year. Interestingly, the number of registered
road
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vehicles
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 in usage in the EU averages the same
amount
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 as Germany and Spain, with the figure being just over 1,000
kilometers
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kilometres
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 annually.
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, the UK was the country that used
road
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transportation
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 at least about 900
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per year in 1996 and 2006.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, road, vehicles, transportation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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