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Some people say that advertisings extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other peopte think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #advertisings #peopte #attention
The
unprecendented
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unprecedented
 growth of
advertisement
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the advertisement
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 industry
enable
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enables
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 individuals to encourage spending for any needs, even
there
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if there
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 is no need.
While
 many
people
 believe that
adversitements
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advertisements
 play a vital role
for
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in
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 selling any product, others think that
people
 no longer realize ads on the screen. In
this
 essay, I will outline both views and give explanations of
success
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the success
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 of advertising for buying items.
Firstly
,
advertisement
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the advertising
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 industry successfully improved
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itself
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themselves
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itself
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 for many years regards to
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apply
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the
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apply
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social media, and companies that
willing
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are willing
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 to increase their visibility are subtly
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persuading
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persuade
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persuading
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 an artificial need for their products or
service
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services
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, even any updates for the same product.
Therefore
, even though
people
are continuously expose
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 to
advertisements
by
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on
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 television or smartphones, there is an
irresistable
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irresistible
 urge to own the latest model of any
technologies
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technology
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.
For instance
, every year there are lines of
people
 in the technology markets who are waiting to buy the newest model of the phone,
although
 more often than not it has only improvements in the camera lenses. So, common or not,
advertisements
 ads are
enourmosly
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enormously
 essential for companies to sell things.
On the other hand
, despite the success of
advertisements
, most of
time
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the time
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 it could be disturbing to see
it
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them
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on
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apply
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everywhere mostly
while
 you
were
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are
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 busy with a task,
for instance
, there are students who are on online education via online platforms
such
 as
Youtube
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YouTube
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, had to deal with
advertisements
 during their pre-recorded courses, which could end with spend money on these platforms in order to block those unstoppable advertises. In conclusion,
success
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the success
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 of
adversitements
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advertisements
on
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in
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 buying things can not be underestimated.
People
 are spending money
whether
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on
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 something that they saw in
the
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an
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 advertisement or something that prevents the
advertisements
itself
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themselves
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 on your screen.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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